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Dear nomad....
This makes me think of a weird but interesting dream i'd have...
The punctuation cleared it up a whole bit...as this is an abstract, i'm not too sure to critique, but it made me think more than most poems.
perhaps a couple more capitals (like after the !) to make it less confusing...as to putting the picture together, and it helps us figure what to put what where.
I mean, like, a "sentence" is connected, and then where there is an end punctuation or capital, I might move to another "part" of the painting to paint another continuous scene. Just a suggestion tho :]
*huggles*
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