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Old 04-12-2008, 06:09 AM
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The Memory of Her Voice

The sound of her voice, is like a butterfly
As it drifts along, lazily , lovely, with out a care
The words fall from her lips like a butterfly flits its wings
A voice as beautiful as evening songs floating in the wind
The sound of her voice brightens my day but the moment soon fades away
And all I have is nothing but the memory of your voice
Dear Bear,

This is beautiful as I expected it to be...lol...I made a few suggestions in bold as well. This poem lingers as your poems do and one can almost feel the song. Stunning Bear.

Kim



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