Hey MS KIM
-- I absolutely LOVE the premise of this! I can see how it's a
"very rough draft" too though
--- The idea though is so interesting - I think though the main element is missing though in this 1st diary entry - The vampirism aspect! It'd be awesome to see that right up front
(but I think - Perhaps you're saving that to weave into the next entry???)
Another - is the tense - Need to keep the tense sorted - Perhaps all the text can be past tense - since it is a reflection on what happens... Not quite sure about this idea though LOL
Nice 1st draft - I like and will definitely be looking forward to the other entries - And especially interested in the next edits!
Jacquii.
