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Hello!
I enjoyed this short story of yours and I think this is an interesting concept as well. One of my favorite parts at the beginning which was some nice humour to the story and made me want to keep on reading was this part here: "My problem was that I seemed to go through men like boxes of Kleenex. I liked how this added a nice bit of humour right in the beginning.
I would maybe reword this part: At thirty-five years old, and having gone through ten failed relationships and attempting more, was the prerequisite to seek out one of the most prestigious (I might add that she was quite piquant as well) Psychologists in the field, as Dr. O’Hara.
Here is my suggestion for this sentence: I've gone through ten failed relationships at 35 years old and I'm attempting more, this track record was a prerequisite to seek out one of the most prestigious (I might add that she was quite piquant as well) Psychologists in the field, Dr. O’Hara. Of course, this is just a suggestion and completely up to you as well.
I really do like how you ended the story as well, and the concept of it. I am intrigued by her dreams and what is happening with her, who is the faceless woman, and what will happen with her and the Doctor? You have some thought-provoking questions to leave the reader with to wonder and ponder about and this is definitely something you need with a story and you got. I'm wondering what will happen next and I'm interested in the main character. I think that you did a great job and I look forward to more dairy entries!
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