Ok, I'm jealous! I thought I was your #1 fan, lol. Please, tell me it isn't so! Tell me I haven't been replaced, Sis! lol just kidding, I think, lol.
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Originally Posted by PaintedDiary
Each bone-chilling night, Dali invaded my privacy, and my body approved the invasion.
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Seriously, Sis, I know this is a rough draft and that things will work out in the ensuing ones (I should know) so I'm not going to go into editing right now. I loved the above quote. It's simple, direct and yet says so freakin much! I love it!
I've read Sarah's suggestions and thought she was right on the nose, so I decided to leave well enough alone, lol. It looks like you've already made the revisions. There's really nothing I can say, right now, other than keep going at it, Sis! The important thing is to get it written then edit!
lubya Sis!
Gail