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Hello Me!
Wow, I really do like this poem of yours... I started reading it and just couldn't stop until I finally was done with the last line. I didn't even notice that it was rhyming until 3 stanzas or so in... which is quite impressive because I can generally predict what word is going to be rhymed with next and focus a lot on rhyming when there is rhyming in a poem. But, your rhyming was subtle and unpredictable... which I enjoyed. I got all of this great imagery as well when I was reading it and it hopped from one image to the next with each line. It flowed nicely and was imaginative too, I had a fun time reading it. I also liked your stanza structure and how you structured the entire poem. One of my favorite lines (which I did have many) was right in the beginning:
The streets are full of thrown out clothes,
A technicolor river.
I like how you describe it as a technicolor river, it made a really interesting image to imagine. Anywho, thanks for sharing and keep on writing away!
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