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Hello Moonchild!
This is just a very indulgent and seductive poem right here... and now I want to take a bubble bath to experience all of this. I really enjoyed your choice of words, imagery, and how every last line had some beautiful imagery going with it. Like with this particular line right here with the first stanza:
of Champaign kissed nirvana.
And I noticed with each last line it had that going and I really enjoyed how the ending of each stanza had such a great play of words and images. I especially liked the 3rd and 4th stanza with how you described the difference between the man and woman. Her being the spirit of Venus and him being the soul of Mars, that was very unique and interesting perspective.
With the 4th stanza I liked how you compared his canine wolf touch and her being feline vixen, which really works well together and how they intertwine with each other. I could literally see this image play out as I read it and I think that you did a wonderful job with the metaphors and the words you chose to weave into your poem. This is such a highly sensual, seductive poem that I really did enjoy reading.
Thank you for sharing your poem and I hope that you keep on writing away!
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