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Old 06-14-2008, 11:02 PM
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i understand the point of the poem by the title but this might be a more exciting read if you weren't repetitive with the words 'this is' it still is interesting and a good poem, just work on not being so repetive. as well with the word 'molded' or 'molding' try and use differant words and it will keep the reader with the flow.

if anyone reading this disagree's feel free to say somthing
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