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Hello Moonchild!
Wow, I really do like this poem of yours! With reading through this poem I gotta say that this has to be one of my favorites. It's a very sensual poem with a lot of great images from one line to the next. You have great imagery with your poems and this one is no exception. I really like how you introduce your reader to the poem with the first paragraph:
In the chill of moon-burn
we lick the liquid of
our ocean's rush in the
rough-dangle of pleasure's play.
This is another beautiful play of words with these two lines right here:
us away to the shores of
rapture where love rustles us into
Though, I could point out several other lines and parts that I enjoyed reading. And, with the strong beginning you also end things strongly as well. I like how you give the image of them burying their toes in sand and meeting the moon again. My favorite part of your poem was this one:
Your body speaks in
meter as I recite the poem of
your language as it incites the
woman in me to rhyme
your pantomime in a
hushed release of expression.
I love how you relate it to a poem with the meter, rhyme, ect. That was just very creative and when I was reading it I just really enjoyed this part. But, like I said before I could pick out many different parts that I found enjoyable. Anywho, thanks for sharing and I hope that you keep on writing away! I really do enjoy reading your poems so I look forward to your next work!
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