Hey CANNABALISTIC - I like the darkness of this poem - It's like at once a testimony of the darkside and a warning that perhaps your deeds will bring you to the darkside - You don't want that LOL
The last stanza is FIRE!
Quote:
The beating in your chest will feed the fire
Of the succubus's growing desire
Let her fangs take over your being
Only the blind can say seeing is believing.
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Love the vampiresque vision here. Almost says "capitulate, for resistance IS futile" The unforced rhyme is so natural too - one could almost miss it. The tempo and structuring and rhythm helps that as well, cause the flow is right on point.
Interesting write.
Thanx for the sharing
Jacquii.
ps - Is this poem about a person?
I've known a few succubus snakes in my lifetime.
They're like irritating flies almost - like leaches even.
