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Hello Thea!
I see that you're stepping into the unknown with trying out free-style poems with this first free-style poem of yours. I have to admit that when I began writing poetry I only did rhyming poetry and that was the only form I knew with writing out my poetry. To tell you the truth I thought that a poem meant that it had to rhyme! I actually have found that the free-style form is actually quite freeing and I really enjoy doing whatever I want and not being restricted with rhyming. You may find that you grow to love the free-style form or you may just like keeping to rhyming poems. Either way I think that you did a fantastic job for your first free-style poem!
I do think this poem may need a bit of tweaking here and there, just in my opinion, and if you want such constructive feedback you can put it over in the Critique Saloon like Mysty suggested. But, I really do think that this is a very intriguing and interesting write that you have here. I also like how you started the poem with her darkness and finished with her seeing that pinprick of light, and showing the transition between the two.
Anywho, I'm glad that you shared this poem with us! And, it was very interesting to see you dabble in the free-style form when I know that you have a certain rhyming style with your poems that you like to strick to so it was fun seeing you try something new. Overall, I enjoyed reading this poem and keep on writing away!
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