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07-10-2008, 10:12 AM

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JeffMeyer

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Biography: I'm just a guy, HAPPILY married ten years (thank you--throw money, not flowers) with three kids tryin' to get by on a wage that stays the same in a world where prices simply don't. (You know the story). I love the out-of-doors, and in-of-books. I am a wordsnob and a vocabulary geek; I have a very off-kilter sense of humor based mostly in liguistics and the appreciation of the non-sequiter.

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CJ:

My! What powerful couplet that ends this poem! I found the four sets of ellipses in the middle of the poem more distracvting than anything. I felt the rhythm was building, and pausing at that point was awkward. But when I read of the infinite sewers, I said: "Yeah! What a thought!" And the infinite clock in the city put me over the moon. So accurate, somehow.

So, while there may have been parts I liked less than others, a superb finish really rounded this off into an extremely valuable read for me. Look forward to more!

--Jeff Meyer