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Old 10-02-2006, 06:31 AM
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Hi Sally,
Thanks a lot for the feedback. I hadn't thought of switching the second and third lines, but come to think of it, you're right, it does seem to make the poem flow smoother, especially in the first stanza. I'm not too sure why, though...I suppose that'll just be another poetic mystery.
Thanks again,
Michael.
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