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08-07-2008, 11:02 AM

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JeffMeyer

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Biography: I'm just a guy, HAPPILY married ten years (thank you--throw money, not flowers) with three kids tryin' to get by on a wage that stays the same in a world where prices simply don't. (You know the story). I love the out-of-doors, and in-of-books. I am a wordsnob and a vocabulary geek; I have a very off-kilter sense of humor based mostly in liguistics and the appreciation of the non-sequiter.

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Erik:

While you are the writer and know your intent best, for this reader

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then i'll be the invisible man on top of the barely visible man.

was by far the most powerful line of the poem. The persona seems to imply here that if his true id were invisible, see-through, clear, perhaps so would be the puzzle of life (or life's current puzzle) that he is trying to solve. Also, by implying that the man, as he is now, is only barely visibly intimates the anonymity of the city dweller (which the title and surrounding lines depict), and illustrates the frustration of one man trying to bring about reaching change, or even trying to figure out which change would be best to enact. The aloneness and insignificance are well shown here, as is the aformention frustration. Nice piece stated in just a few lines; that's a rare gift. Well done.

--Jeff Meyer