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Real Name: Jeff Meyer
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Biography: I'm just a guy, HAPPILY married ten years (thank you--throw money, not flowers) with three kids tryin' to get by on a wage that stays the same in a world where prices simply don't. (You know the story). I love the out-of-doors, and in-of-books. I am a wordsnob and a vocabulary geek; I have a very off-kilter sense of humor based mostly in liguistics and the appreciation of the non-sequiter.
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Eric:
A painful scene depicted here. That third stanza (strophe?) seems to imply a realtaionship issue, which casts the whole reason for the passing into a questionable, if not sinister, light. How, indeed, did this come about? the reder is left wondering.
I would eliminate the last line (my opinion only). It is rather telly, and we already know she has died from stanza 7. Just a thought.
Interestng read, Eric.
--Jeff Meyer
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