Hiya Bookworm..... I have a suggestion that may improve the flow of Stanza 4 ... instead of
Quote:
but our brief encounter
left me a bit empty
now your loving heart has disappeared.
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try
but our brief encounter
left me a bit empty
when your loving heart disappeared.
Just a thought you can use or lose. I enjoyed this poem of yours. I will be watching your work with interest.
Mysty
