Despite all the meticulously pointed-out-correction-commentary - I would not change a word. Your poem reads with more than a bit of melancholy heartache and loss. The world could do well to have experienced such an emotion IMO - Everybody just trolloping around in their 3 and a half dollar suits, doing the 9 - 5 dance, smiling and cutting up and such when all they want to do is slam the damn door and sulk, bidding adieu to love lost.... We're an interesting society in that we are the only animal of "superb being" - so jadely super - we tend to believe our own lies. We pay for the popcorn and candies as well.... Hell.... I hear The Black Knight (most recent batman feature film) has surpassed the $400 MILLION dollar mark. Of course if you've seen it - you would certainly understand the concept of suspiciously romantic with a side order of I-Hate-the-world LOL --- Such an audacious respect for the Joker
3 cheers that an incredible percentage of US can actually act as if we "silently care" - 3 additional cheers that we may (in our sparetime act) actually learn to "silently care" - and another 3 cheers for the eventual hope that we will surpass the silence and actually give a damn, trumpeting on to the world an emphatic FREEDOM! call.
Nice poem BOOKTHIEF - I do not know if I'm quite crazy about your nickname though
- and I hope that my commentary for this beautiful poem of yours makes some sort of sense.
Thanx for the share.
Jacquii.
