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Thanks, Sarah! I'm not too concerned about the POV right now since I'm just trying to get the story written period, but you've given me much insight and advice here. Yes, Mara is umm...quite a...well, you know...lol.
When you read part b, you'll find out more. This just get more interesting as it goes along. I'm thinking about dividing this chapter into scenes as well since it's so long. There's quite a lot which goes on here and much revealed. It was the opening scene of Eilia at one time but the characters are constantly changing my mind, lol.
I'm so glad you like the things I do! I thought it so telling of Mara's character when she pinched Eilia's bottom and thought it really defined her as a character I love to hate, lol.
I'm looking forward to finding out what you think of part b.
hugs,
Gail
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