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Old 08-11-2008, 01:54 PM
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i really enjoyed this!

"To feel your sweet breath
Like an Indian feather"


was a very unique metaphor and it added to the soft feel of the poem.

with this line i think you have captured the delicate portrayal of the person you are writing about...

"I’m so enamored
Of your butterfly eyes
That dart with exhilaration
Toward any new pursuit."


all in all it was very nice write and i'm looking forward to more by you
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