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Now, this is an interesting concept with death waiting at the sense of someone's fingertips. I really enjoyed this part of your poem and what you're saying with it:
That vibrating out of your fingers
radiates a Lazarus moment;-
At first I had to think about the Bibical moment and who Lazarus was but then remembered it and it kind of added another element to the poem as I was reading it. I would maybe suggest switching up some words that were repeated more than once, like with "wait" and "waiting", but this is just a suggestion and completely up to you. But, besides this I found nothing else to suggest with your poem.
Anywho, thank you for sharing and keep on writing away!
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