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Well there's always someone who says they like the first version, and that is me this time.
it seems more organic, i can picture it , that process 'that never ends', and you keep the image of the snake, rather than mixing your metaphors; it also has a more conversational-less formal, more intimate- style that I personally like more. hope it makes sense; all in all,they're both pretty good
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