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Sartor, Two points.
One: Amzy is a "He".
Two: My suggestion was "How soon will they neglect", which does change the meaning, but not as drasticly as you suggest.
Synchro: No, my suggestion isn't quite right, it's just the first thing that came to mind. And it reads fine the way it is...but my tongue trips at "Be aware". I either get a pause or it becomes "Beware" when I read out loud.
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