Quote:
We thought that a wish would stand the test of times
We thought our freestyles could stand the best of rhymes
But our metaphors and similes, were too easy for comprehension
Thought we had an intergalactic vibe, now its lost in a 3rd dimension
You were once my exclamation, now you're the period at the end my sentence.
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I said WHOA!!!!!!! Hey YNGST - this piece is almost heartbreaking - It would be heartbreaking, but I'm just absolutely loving the rhythm this poem has and the way you laid the words down!
Very impressive write - So many of us have fallen in that hole of thinking life is but a lily-white dream decorated with pigmy orchids and honeysuckle... This write makes some think twice before thinking that about life - But I wonder if there is some kind of middle ground to be had with the strife?
I think yes - Love has been given a bad name - but you have dispelled all rumors with this line:
Love costs nothing except commitment and trust
Love sometimes is confused with infatuation and lust
Very nice write! Thanx for sharing it with us AND Welcome to the JPiC Community - If you haven't done so already - please introduce yourself via the
Member Introductions thread
Jacquii.
