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Hey Yngst...
I like MsJacquiiC too enjoyed this read....Actually Iloved it....I'll tell you why...I love poems that gives me visuals of more than one thing or more than what the believed topic at hand is... I too saw this as a"LOVE LOST" piece sort of sad and blue..But full of thought provoking lines...for instance:
My problem was that I neglected to look at your faults
And You neglected mines
We thought that a wish would stand the test of times
Beautifully written...so real in that when we speak about love and dream about love we sometimes get caught up in the fairy-tale world of EVERYTHING being perfect sometimes not taking the time to view things and people for what and who they REALLY are....overlooking imperfections and things that later on will affect our relationship with them.....very nice poet...
I also look at this piece as a "peace" to poetry herself.....how beautiful she is and yet still you hit a bump in the road....seeming as if your relationship is over.(writer block perhaps) but these words here, again my favorite
My problem was that I neglected to look at your faults
And You neglected mines........
We thought our freestyles could stand the best of rhymes
But our metaphors and similes, were too easy for comprehension
Thought we had an intergalactic vibe, now its lost in a 3rd dimension
You were once my exclamation, now you're the period at the end my sentence.
No vengeance, no vendetta
No quotes, no love letters......
Maybe next time we'll both be clever...
I really love this work here...in terms of poetry not realizing all that's involved in this "art" and when you finally do its a bitter-sweet ending and beginning all in one...its a serious matter of expression and without a great appreciation for it you loose the love you once had for eachother....I fell in love with poetry and I'm so glad it loves me back...
Anyway..I say all of that to say that I enjoyed the read...poetic love to you..
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