[b]Now I'm 56 years old but I'll tell you what...as I was reading this, I could hear a rap song in it. Truly, I think it would make a great one and I'm not even into rap...smile. Some of my kids, even though the youngest is now in his twenties, listen to rap and as I read your poem, I couldn't help that the beat and flow was just coming in my head like one of the songs my kids have played on their CD player. Good job indeed!
