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Betrayal
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Left with catalytic fears,
she prefers to be alone;
the story like a fungus grows,
in person and by phone.
No warning given at all
of the never ending tears;
nor of the feel of lonely
from love held in arears.
To herself she questions self
and all she thought she knew,
fearing who she may become,
now christened by abuse.
You can knock upon her door
but she won't allow you in;
she sits alone in darkness,
calling no one 'friend'.
He left after he was caught
entwined in a lover's charms,
mezmerized by new spent lust
that pooled upon her arm.
His words ran as liquid fire
to explain away their past,
leaving her again alone
with burns and broken glass.
This work was written out of my own anger over the broken marriage of my best friend and her husband. Betrayal is never easily seen until it is found suddenly...
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Benny! Some of your anger came through in this but mostly I see a lot of empathy and some great insight also. Especially in these lines:
To herself she questions self
and all she thought she knew,
It is hard to place blame on someone we love - no matter how deserving of it they may be. Rather than blame the one we love, we tend to look for excuses for him/her and turn the blame onto ourselves or those around us. Eventually though, there comes a time when we have to wake up to the truth.
It usually takes two people to fail in marriage...I am sure this is not always the case...but to reflect honestly what one should have, could have done is one of the hardest things a broken heart can do.
Hi dear Benny!! I was looking for your poem, and I found it here. WOW!! I am so impressed by the truth of the words expressed, and so well conveyed in your message to the readers. I place myself into the poem, and I can understand what BETRAYAL is. I was betrayed so many times in my lifetime. So, I am not surprissed that it happens with other folks, as well. I like to play a fair play and with Justice for All. I am a Loyal Woman, and I expect the same in return. At times, I feel like to follow the Proverb: "An eye for an eye...", in my past relationships with men. God bless you, Benny!! Happy New Year 2007 with your loved ones!! Hugs. Sincerely, Stardust.
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Dear Benny,
Yes, a tough topic when a friendship is involved. Truly, I am so sorry, your friend went through this, yet it seems to be a broken record anymore. How noble of you to write to help heal the pain, for both of you. Great write, my friend.
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Originally Posted by PaintedDiary
Dear Benny,
yet it seems to be a broken record anymore.
Yep - tough topic no doubt - Broken record? Yep --- Scratched record where such deceit and betrayal is only played again and again and again and again...
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He left after he was caught
entwined in a lover's charms,
mezmerized by new spent lust
that pooled upon her arm.
Though this may be a bit cynical - Perhaps it's for the best that the ugly truth come out ... Perhaps the spurned lover can get somewhere else where the love that she has to offer can be truly appreciated, rather than spit upon like such snake venom...
Nice of you to share this poem with us BENNY - thanx,
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Originally Posted by MsJacquiiC
Though this may be a bit cynical - Perhaps it's for the best that the ugly truth come out ... Perhaps the spurned lover can get somewhere else where the love that she has to offer can be truly appreciated, rather than spit upon like such snake venom...
Nice of you to share this poem with us BENNY - thanx,
Jacquii.
Benny,
You can't say it any better, than what Ms Jacquii said in that quote. Take Care.
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