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Old 01-23-2007, 02:15 AM
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Broken Dreams
Broken Dreams

Grit
broken
shattered glass
shards upon the
ground


dreams
broken
ignored and
never spoken
here


moods
mirrored
transparent
to beloved
still


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lovely poem nomad,
I enjoyed the layered phrases and also the highlighted words,
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Old 01-23-2007, 05:44 PM
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Therese...your words fall as softly as a soft rain in this one. Just beautiful!
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Blue words for a sad subject - nice touch, Therese! You have certainly mastered this form, everything is right on! AND instead of outright statements you have added excellent imagery to it as well!




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Thanks Benny and Tree! I love this form...running away to write more now...well, after I tweak, polish and re-positon New York!

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a amazing work....i like the verbals and the shape of the work....

what form is that, if any?
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Hi dazamaru,

Thanks for the compliment!

This is a lanturne, a thread introduced by Altree. See "Friendship Lanturne" in Creative Traditional by Altree where she explains the form.

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