Creative TraditionalCelebrating Mother Earth? Seasonal, Traditional & Rhyming poetry posts here. (i.e. sonnet, limerick, haiku & all other poetic forms as seen in the Poetry-Defined section.) a villanelle
Caroline
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Ronnie Van Zant
Did I ever mention that I went to the same high school as Phil and Don Everly? "Wake Up Little Suzy" Had a lot of help with this one. Thanks Ronnie. Thanks Joe. Thanks Tom & Brad.
Last edited by Kit Carson; 06-05-2008 at 09:40 PM.
Reason: Poet's re-vision
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Originally Posted by Kit Carson
Every time I hear that song they play
I think of dreams we never had
Turn your pretty head~walk away
I try to figure out the way
I could have been your golden lad
Every time I hear that song they play
Turn your pretty head~walk away
mjcarson
7-11-2007
Dear Kit ,
Wow, this was a lovely memory and a confessional Villanelle of sorts. How beautiful reminiscing can be, and never really know sometimes where it can lead in our minds, then to our canvas of words. I felt this one, and I sat back in my chair and tried to picture her, and possibly what could have been. Can relate to this one. One for the Affective Domain for sure! The introductory stanza set the tone, and the story just melted in place. Thank you for sharing this with us Kit.
{{{~~~***Kimberly***~~~}}}
Last edited by PaintedDiary; 07-11-2007 at 10:41 PM.
Reason: typo
Thank you. Yes things are so real in high school. She sort of rescued from darkness,but I couldn't rescue her. Obviously much left unsaid here. I posted a poem to her on my site and it fell flat. I found it was very mixed up. I found three in my book, two of them with same title. Used them to help create this. She is the reason I joined ROTC (to be near her) And then she walked away, not from me, her life. I might not have joined the Navy if not for her. That would be different path...wow. On and on it goes.
Yeah, Phil and Don both went to West High in Knoxville Tennessee. In the 1950's, of course. There's not even a plaque or anything. Thanks, but I ripped that off of Joe Walsh. I don't think he would be mad though. I think of her when I hear Joe sing that song. Thanks Jerry! You clown! LOL! I'm a little dense today!
When I came to copy this last night to put on another site...I noticed some obvious flaws in it that I had not seen before...that tells me that I am getting better at writing this form and all form in truth. Free verse had always been my thing before and is still predominate in my poetry...but dang if I haven't become a lover of form in poetry and a true believer that to be a poet...all forms must at least be experienced. The growth that occurs in this process is simply amazing and quite a bit of that came from within this forum...thank you all for being part of that. JCiP rocks!
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