feralpen

Beth Castillo

Well ... well ... that's not too bad ... the shakespearian quality adds to the romance of the piece as well as the tragic and bittersweet ending ... can't wait to see more

feralpen

Evening Beth;

Thanks for stopping by for a read and leaving a wonderful comment. I like poems that tell stories, so I try to do some of those. Rime Royale is supposed to maintain iambic pentameter as does the English Sonnet. I just have a devil of a time with stressed and unstressed. I do hope to get better with the form. Thanks again.

fp

nomadicrhymer

FP I love this piece because I feel that the old English wording adds to the "risk all for love story"...sucker for a happy ending usually, but this is very well written and entertaining to boot. I haven't heard of a Rime Royal before, so I shall have to check it out.

Thanks for posting...
Nomad

feralpen

Morning nomad;

Thanks so much for the wonderful comment and encouragement. I'm pretty new to form poetry. I researched the English Sonnet some, but many of my poems tend to go long. I can't always get a story finished in 14 lines. The Rime Royale allows an unlimited number of 7 line stanzes. Pattern is ababbcc. Iambic pentameter. And should retain the strict stressed/unstressed rhythm. As you can see, I have much to learn.

I like happy endings too.

fp

PaintedDiary

Dear fp,

This was quite a storem as I call them (poetry + story). The addition of the "Old English" language, adds to the richness of the romance. To have the patience to scribe beauty as such is remarkable. Most Rime Royal's can be quite long, and this was just enough to capture the bitter and the sweet in three stanzas, as well as swallow your audience in the process...tis a classic. I give you much respect for scribing such a strict poetic form, and the result is as beautiful as a 16th century Reymerswaele. I look forward to reading more of you as this was a poetic treat to be brought back to the 16th century. Loved it fp.

Kim

feralpen

Dear PD;

Oh my! What a kind comment for my poem. I'm glad that my attempt at the period vernacular came through at least a little. I haven't developed a true style yet ... still searching. A lot of my poetry is not for everyone, I tend to write in a phonetic speech pattern that to me is more how folks hear than how they speak... drives grammar students nutzzzzzz !

But for now... thank you for the wonderful comment and encouragement.

fp