PaintedDiary

Dear Jeff,

I love love love this poem. This is my 10th read I think..lol Could you do me a favor? Could you please tell what was your inspiration for this piece? I do invison a beautiful pastel or oil pastel painting with this poem. I too have to do a few reads to embrace the full details and the richness of the poem. For me, a small suggestion would be to perhaps find some alternative / more creative ways to starting multiple stanzas with "he", and may minimize the possible question of "Who is he?" Please do not get me wrong I understood the poem and like it as it is, however, using an alternative may help with the "fluidity of reading" by your audience. I think it is great when we get our audience to ponder, want more, ask questions, and be curious. Thanks Jeff for posting and reading my commentary. Take Care.

Kim