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The First Dawn of Spring
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This is one of my first attempts to write poetry. I wrote it after reading Goethe's "The first night of the Walpurgis".
The First Dawn of Spring
The golden chariot of Helios is risen
From depths forgot' by the slits of the earth;
Cajoles the greens 'till frost recedes,
Brings mirth to drowsy meads.
Grass grown pale and flow'rs in mourning
Coldly salute the warm, transcending gleam;
Leaves bristling, rustling in fresh air,
Awaken the wood from the last nights' despair.
A cockerel cries to life and death, alike;
The Easterly winds softly rattle the burgeons
Of oaks and pines, and rows of vines,
Freed from last ice by the heavens' shine.
Numbèd corpses of creatures' souls
Then chain'd by slumber to fragile nests,
Slowly crawl to affairs the morrow brought;
A final day of agony in a war long fought.
Michael Bironneau
Last edited by mbironneau; 09-14-2006 at 11:25 AM.
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This is veryminteresting poem, it made me believe that you were kinda describing scenery from a medevil place. It was very beautiful and produced a massive amount of imagery that helps the imagination illustrate the story...;Thank You
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OK, you say first attempt.....then I should stop writing now! This was amazing, unique, and has a style all its own. Awesome!!!! Thank you for posting!!!
Sorry I took so long to get back to you, everyone.
Thanks for the encouragement, KingAce. You're right, I did want to create a bit of a medieval atmosphere. BTW, I loved "A chance". Fantastic.
Hi, Altree. No, it wasn't quite my first attempt (it was the 3rd, if I remember), but thanks for the praise. I thought I'd try a different rhyme scheme, I'm glad you liked it.
Hey Painted, not quite the first attempt, and pleeaase don't stop writing, lol--I love your work. But thanks a lot for the compliments.
Hi Sid, thanks for the feedback. I can see why the last line might seem to jump out. lol about Spock! But then again I did intend the mood to be at least a bit contradictory--after all, the first day of spring is the last day of winter, right?
