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Old 06-26-2008, 09:07 AM
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Frozen Butterfly
trapped before me with wings of gold, purple and tangerine



they flutter not but my heart pretenses such actions

like a ballerina in a box I imagine the symphony as the insect plays



but this winged creature of whimsy is out of luck,

at least in there he'll never age.



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Old 06-27-2008, 11:55 PM
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trapped before me with wings of gold, purple and tangerine

like a ballerina in a box I imagine the symphony as the insect plays

at least in there he'll never age.
Dear Erik,

I found this poem to be very intriguing with beautiful language. I love the tangerine and the second line I quoted here is simply exquisite. I found the last line to be interesting in the fact that you use "he'll"....which made my thoughts spin in other directions. I thought hmmmm...Is the butterfly a "male" butterfly or is the butterfly a symbol or metaphor? I could be way of track...nonetheless....the poem is quite mystifying to me.

What was your inspiration for this if I may ask?

Thank you for posting Erik.

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Old 07-05-2008, 05:33 PM
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Excellent penning Erik the life of a butterfly is a year but to caputre one and encdase it to preserve it is good durning the winter you can take it look at it and reminise about simmer
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thanks Kim and Bear

yeah Bear its a great thing,

I think a butterfly is one of natures most whimsical works



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Erik,

Much imagery here to seduce the mind and emotions. Great use of the American language!

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Oooh! Wonderful poem, but now you've made me guilty. A butterfly flew into my hand while I was biking today and I killed it!. Anyway, lovely use of words and imagination here thanks for sharing.



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Ooh Erik... exquisite... but release my brethren please??

Caged

this caged heart beats
like a fragile butterflies wings
against the invisible cage
fighting for freedom
to feel.

You are the freedom
of this butterflies emotions.



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