Late for the Ball

JolieH · 05-13-2008, 12:47 PM

This morning is sadness
words I discover
leave me a lonely bluebird
in ruins of an ancient bird bath,
pecking residue of crusted moss.
Where is the life in this lost tale?
Skeletons of horses, a rotted pumpkin
wait to escort Cinderella
in aftermath of holy war.
I should have been here yesterday
when statues of cherubs
pissed fountains of fresh water.
I could have drank from
the silver cup,
worn silk ribbons in my hair.
What's left, but I'm sorry.
They didn't like you.
You weren't chosen
to light a prince's eye.
You were a mistake they tried to erase.
You came too late.
You'll just have to accept,
you were nothing but a stupid girl
that didn't understand.
Fly away bluebird.
There's nothing for you here
just bones of a dead dream.

Moonchild · 05-13-2008, 10:35 PM

This is interesting and intriguing.
Lots of great lines and images.
Enjoyed a bunch and I really like it.
Great job Jolie!

butchiesmom · 05-14-2008, 11:39 AM

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Originally Posted by JolieH

You'll just have to accept,
you were nothing but a stupid girl
that didn't understand.
Fly away bluebird.
There's nothing for you here
just bones of a dead dream.

Such a sad statement! Makes me want to cry!

Sad but hauntingly beautiful poem, JolieH.
Gail

Tha-Emissary · 05-14-2008, 11:42 AM

Mmm this is raw! Talk about not happily everafter this is it. I think this line, "in ruins of an ancient bird bath" sounds like soap scum! Very great descriptions JolieH!

Bear · 05-22-2008, 06:21 PM

A sad and haunting poem Jolie almost made me cry but so many truths written into your poem that it is beautifully written bravo
hugs kisses
tom

Curtis Spider Lee · 06-05-2008, 10:49 AM

Hello Jolie H, just had to read this after reading your title"Late for the Ball" It turns out to be more than a party poem as I have first thought. Instead it blew me away with lines like this one

Quote:

Originally Posted by JolieH

Skeletons of horses, a rotted pumpkin
wait to escort Cinderella

Wow! that was really good/shockingly beautful! My kinda party! Thanks for sharing!

Kit Carson · 06-05-2008, 08:57 PM

My friend, I have already commented on this poem somewhere else...but the beauty and reality of this medium allows me to comment here also while not having a clue what I said before. My only possible reaction is to chase after my stuff that just got blown across the room. And that is on the second read...it will take many reads for that reaction to wear off my friend. Superb!!

JolieH · 06-06-2008, 09:48 AM

Thank You all for reading,
thanks for your kind words.

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