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Old 09-10-2007, 04:48 PM
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That one night
That one night

He lies there, smiling sweetly, resplendent
in his manliness; his mysteries
dissolving, slowly, in my gaze.
His understanding and warmth
have reawakened all my
sensitivities.
Though forbidden,
I can’t help
loving
him

Her
eyes shine
with the glow
of love released.
Passions, once alive
and unrelenting, now
resurfacing in a flood
of senses overflowing the
edges of ecstasy; only to be
subdued again – but never forgotten.
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Old 09-12-2007, 12:55 AM
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Brilliant Terence!! I am loving this piece...like two halves of a whole, they combine perfectly, romantically, and aesthetically.

Simply exquisite work.

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Old 09-12-2007, 11:58 AM
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Hi Therese, I appreciate you words very much. I started with 'him' and 'her', then it was just a matter of putting the two together, and adding a bit of spicy intrigue of course.

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Great idea, I like the hour glass form, and how they meet were the sands of time sift between them.



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Old 09-13-2007, 10:22 PM
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Wonderful Terence A beautiful depiction of love.

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Hi Jolie, an interesting take on the shape. The Ethere form, with syllable count going from 1 through 10 on each line, lends itself to the pyramid shape. I had another reason for this shape but yours is equally appropriate. Thanks for the reply.


Thanks, Mysty, I'm pleased you liked it. Your words are appreciated.

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Hi TERENCE - very nice poem - As MS N says - I like the way even the words look like 2 parts of the whole... It's like an hour glass - like the ying and yang - epitomizing a fantasy of love perhaps...

My favorite lines is at the pinnacle perhaps:

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Though forbidden,
I can’t help
loving
him

Her
eyes shine
with the glow
of love released.
Beautiful sentiments make for a heartfelt tribute/ode to love, even though the last line leaves a pessimistic feeling: subdued again – but never forgotten. Perhaps such is the feeling one has whilst in the midst of one-night-stand.

At anyrate - a very nice Ethere poem.
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Hi Ms Jacquii,
I really appreciate your thoughts. If you scratch the surface a little, particularly all 9 lines you quote, you may find there is more to the story than just a random one-night-stand, or maybe not if I haven't expressed myself well enough.

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