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Old 08-12-2007, 08:56 PM
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Tetractys - Hear Me
Heard
Your words
But dismiss
The lies you spake,
I tire of hearing all the noise you make.

Guile is fearing the call your voices fake,
My soul you take
And nothing
More is
Stirred.

Third
In turn,
A cuckhold
Whose heart you break,
Have slept too long but now am wide awake.
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Old 08-12-2007, 11:25 PM
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What poor man's nest your wife has layed her eggs?

A well crafted poem - admirer of the great Will Shakespeare I presume?



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Old 08-13-2007, 10:51 AM
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Perfect form and good content.
This is really good work, enjoyed!
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Thank you for reading. This was one of my closed form challenge entries on another forum. I sometimes use variations of this form, altering the syllable count.
Yes, I am a fan of Willy, though I don't try to imitate his style.



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James,

This short poem carries quite a punch. The words have been carefully crafted and bring the reader easily to its conclusion. My Fav:

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Guile is fearing the call your voices fake,
My soul you take
And nothing
More is
Stirred.
and alas, you and your reader are freed!

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Heard
Your words
But dismiss
The lies you spake,
I tire of hearing all the noise you make.

Guile is fearing the call your voices fake,
My soul you take
And nothing
More is
Stirred.

Third
In turn,
A cuckhold
Whose heart you break,
Have slept too long but now am wide awake.
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Dear Phono,

I really loved this. In its brevity is a volume of truth and a message unfolds. Great write here you have. Truly a lovely piece. Thank you for sharing. An excellent rating!

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Heard
Your words
But dismiss
The lies you spake,
I tire of hearing all the noise you make.

Guile is fearing the call your voices fake,
My soul you take
And nothing
More is
Stirred.
Third
In turn,
A cuckhold
Whose heart you break,
Have slept too long but now am wide awake.

This is how it was formatted originally. Non-traditional, I know, but I felt it represented a movement away from darkness and deceipt, toward light and awareness.
Thank you, Jerry.



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