Thank you for your comments.
I'm glad that so many of you, who have read it, is liking it.
That really keeps me motivated to keep writing
Thank you!
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Originally Posted by Altree94
This was great! It may be YOUR life but it has something that everyone can relate to! I like how it starts out, gloomy and sad and then slowly builds up to positive, joyful climax! It is very inspiring to see someone with the courage and the confidence to say "Hey, I'm ME, I LIKE me and if you don't, that's YOUR problem!". Keep writing, Tanax - you've got some great potential!
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Thank you Altree94
I'm also kind of proud that so many can relate to it.
It really shows me that people out there in the world experienced the same.
Again, thank you very much, and I will most definitly keep writing
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Originally Posted by Amzy
Very powerful poem, Tanax. I'm liking it a lot. I would suggest changing the very last statement from "I'm TANAX" to "I AM TANAX". Losing the contraction strengthens the statement, and that is a strong statement.
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It's a really good suggestion.
In fact, I'll do it straight away, because you are 100% correct.
Thanks
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Originally Posted by erikestabrook
it sjust seems odd to me that you emersed yourself so much in this identity, our poetry as of late shares some similarities, but I choose to be who I am in real life, because I have nothing to fear in that, Its seem syou have struggled long tanax and I feel this poem was good but I wouldn't lose side of who you are your abnormalities and insecurities are still part of YOURSELF
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I know, but if I want to meet people I still gotta straighten up and become more forward, instead of this passive side I got right now.
Thanks for your comment
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