JolieH

Like birds of common attribute,
we congregate, connected by light,
twisting seats, bending toes,
sipping soda, coffee, beer, and wine.

Stare into the light,
nimble fingers trained to respond,
play to please the mind.
sound absent, information condensed.

Thoughts like tentacles
read into the light, feel for others,
unite, entwine, some for life,
emotions fabricate chains.

Epiphanies spark light candles,
fertilize articulation,
birthing new ideas,
maturing through space and time.

Subconscious fixes relations,
magnetic tentacles sort stimuli,
likenesses attract, congregate,
twisting seats, bending toes.

Aumakua

Woooow, i like the vividness this poem has But i need a dictionary cuz there's quite a few words i don't understand. Really really awesome job on this one

Bear

excellent penning Jolie I love it , just one question ?
Thoughts like tentacles
read into the light, feel for others,

is it suppose to be read into the light or was it suppose to be reach into the loght
hugs kisses
bear

Benny

Good work! Love the way you kept the flow forward and complete.

Terence

Hi Jolie, I've noticed that you have written some really good poetry, perhaps underappreciated by me at least. Your lines

"Thoughts like tentacles
read into the light, feel for others,
unite, entwine, some for life,
emotions fabricate chains."

are very powerful, inventive, and have a lot of sophistication. I also think the same of your progression in S4, in fact, I'm impressed by the whole piece.

Terence

JolieH

Thanks Riha, Bear, Benny, and Terence,

I nearly forgot I wrote this one, but reading back on it, I like it too. This is a time of internet communication and not much poetry on the subject. One might traditionaly find computers absent of emotion, but interntet relations can be quite sentimental. Emotion being an important quality of poetry, I think there is territory to be explored within this medium.