Biography: Jacquii Cooke is a 32 year old Black Poet from Oak Ridge, Tennessee. As Webmistress of Poetry in Color Forum, she is devoted to the more abstract styles, especially those with a strong feminine voice that center around the topic of redemption and righting the wrongs of past transgressions.
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Spark Your Creativity #10 (Pushkin Sonnet Challenge)
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Hey now, PD. This was a fantabulous sonnet - I knew you would shine~!! I really loved this. I did figure out what a painted woman was (and throughout I wondered if this was an autobiography!!!lololol), thanx for pointing that out, lol... Seriously, this was, no, is some great poetry. Your visuals (as I've stated previously), left a deep impression upon me. I loved the theme - and also the pillar of salt line - that immediately placed the lady of the picture - seemingly testing the waters with her toe - into my head (where it is still resting to this point). Kudos to you!! Great writing throughout.......
Dear lasher--->Thank you so much for the kind words and encouragement to write the Pushkin!! Hehehehehehhehe, autobiography, heheheheheheheh, I loved that!!!!! But seriously, lol, I was thrilled to read you enjoyed the pillar of salt line!!!! When I saw the painting of the woman, I envisioned her sitting on a pillar, next to the ocean, equating the ocean with the salt, testing the toe, yes, lol, her leg swinging back and forth, and she was contemplating some heavy life decisions. That vision is what I built my story around, and that Pushkin twas the result. Thank you again lasher!! You know I have to tease you with the blushing smiley! Hehehehe.
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Originally Posted by MsJacquiiC
And what a FABULOUS Pushkin Sonnet it is - The rhyme schematic is executed flawlessly - But this is a DEEP poem really - The rhythmic flow only goes to enhance the story line - This poem... The content, the storyline is DEEPNESS - like I said in the Chatbox - from the word "gems" down to the definition of "painted woman" --- A fabulous write!
But enough of that = Excellent challenge answer KIM - I enjoyed your writing immensely!
I may actually try another, as I'm really liking the form Pushkin Sonnet... But I don't know if I dare follow yours LOL - that was some SCANDALOUS writing Girl ---- In a good way:
please judge me not, lest you have lived my life
WHOA! I here ya!
Jacquii.
Dear Ms Jacquii, thank you so much for this challenge Ms Jacquii, as it twas most challenging, and yes, I struggled! I feel like a better poet now, after going through your poetic boot camp, lololol. What I love also about you Ms Jacquii is that you DO Challenge us with quite the CHALLENGE!!! You expect us to raise the bar, push ourselves to be the best writers we can be. I thank you for that. I was pleased with my outcome. My rhythmic flow and rhyme schematic came from my lessons from Sartor, so I was doing cartwheels to ready about that in your response. Ahhhhh...I think SCANDALOUS is my middle name, hehehehehehe. Thanks again Ms Jacquii.
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Originally Posted by Mysty
Dear Kim,
I agree with MsJacquii ..... a Fabulous write.... I have never tried one of these Sonnets.... You did rise to the challenge and so wonderfully done. Thank You for sharing a very fabulous write.
~Mysty~
Dear Mysy, thank you so much for reading my Pushkin, and your kind words. I was ecstatic to see that you did indeed write one!!!!! I to, have never written a Sonnet, and now I feel special, lololool. Your Sonnet was a fabulous write as well, as it hit home. Thank you so much Mysty.
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PD! I cannot believe that you actually wrote a sonnet! and not only that but it is perfect in form, and amazingly well done!!!!! AHA! And you thought you could never do it!
You are growing as a poet in leaps and bounds and I am so very proud of you, sis!!!
- Tree.
PD! I cannot believe that you actually wrote a sonnet! and not only that but it is perfect in form, and amazingly well done!!!!! AHA! And you thought you could never do it!
You are growing as a poet in leaps and bounds and I am so very proud of you, sis!!!
- Tree.
Hey Sis,
Thank you so much for taking time to read and comment. I NEVER thought I would write a Sonnet, and here we are! Thank you sooo much. I tried to have perfect flow, rhythm, and syllable count. All learned from Sartor. I really do feel like I am growing as a poet now, and it feels sooooo good. Thanks again sis, and love ya"!!!
what is this mess about "Ms Jacquii's Sonnet Bootcamp"
Jacquii.
LOLOLOL Ms Jacquii, I wondered when that smiley would show up, who would use it, and why. LOLOLOL Twas a challenge Ms Jacquii, and dare I say, "Your Sonnet Bootcamp" was WELL WORTH IT!!!!! Love Ya'!! Hehehehehe
tehehehehehe --- OK - I'm glad you guys and gals enjoyed!
The next challenge will be quite nice as well..... I dare say "bootcamp" but nice just the same
The painter in a Monet world inspired,
by moon-soaked flesh and curves that speak proclaimed,
his Juliet in brush strokes so desired,
dipped in colors, a passion so renamed
where in his eyes a vision so beautiful
beyond an art his heart paints dutiful.
For his sore eyes was more than recompense,
a heightening of senses circumstance
and as he filled in every curve and shape,
she sat there lithe like swan in graceful poise.
His Juliet in color screamed like noise
so vividly in paint to canvas rape.
He touched her nudity with not one feel.
His colors were a touch closer to real.