Biography: Jacquii Cooke is a 32 year old Black Poet from Oak Ridge, Tennessee. As Webmistress of Poetry in Color Forum, she is devoted to the more abstract styles, especially those with a strong feminine voice that center around the topic of redemption and righting the wrongs of past transgressions.
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Spark Your Creativity #6 (CinqTroisDecaLa Rhyme Challenge)
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TY Ms J - I missed that part I guess, it was a challenge all the same, you see I used all but one of the words from the list.
Erik TY 4 your comments, U know poetry is about being able to use anything and make it work for you. :-)
Lanaia- Ty, you are very kind. Ms J puts some hard stuff out there, try them sometime. They turn out to be quite fun though- I must admit.....
This was indeed one of the most exciting challenges for me to attempt.......having said that, and thinking about Vodka Slayer's vampire story, and the photograph.......I attempt an abstract CinqTroisDecaLa rhyme.
Strawberry Decay
Ancient seed, of a soul colored claret, when he came to me
Alas came the day, my mortality, no longer reign free
I partake of sweet revelries, strawberry of the unknown
Tantalizing aromas, as I compliment your neck bone
Your breath pulsates heavily, as we succumb to wanton flesh
Taste of human essence, a copious harvest, savors fresh
You slide into Utopia's Shangrila, feeding pink flesh
You spin a web of geometric pearls in and out of me
So fine the pronounced arteries of young men, not fully grown
Slumber deep my love for I've ingested you, at your request
Last edited by PaintedDiary; 02-04-2007 at 05:53 PM.
wow ty..I know it was good cos I only understood every other word of it lol
When a poem confuses me (granted it's easily done) I know it's a good one lol
seriously tho this was really well written and i love how u picked out words to mean something totally different...thankyou xx
Hey MS KIM - I've got to say the CinqTroisDecaLa Rhyme is by far one of my favorite forms... And you've written JUST LOVELY! very nice piece indeed. Kinda erotic flavor - Like MS SEBBY's vampire tale:
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You spin a web of geometric pearls in and out of me
So fine the pronounced arteries of young men, not fully grown
Slumber deep my love for I've ingested you, at your request
That very last line "at your request" ---- hmmmmm now that's a bit of eroticism - Possibly you know of my daydream of being utterly devoured by a HANDSOME and totally poetic Vampire?
It gets better and better every time I read it. Yeeoooww! Talk about getting the salacious juices flowing!....where do you come up with this stuff, Kim?
Well, here is my humble offering...I hope I got the beat and all that stuff right, Ms. J!
Strawberry Lov...er
The gardens abound…crystal jewels on thy leafy green crown
my love delights….my heart…a splendor in velvety red gown
forsooth! dear one…lie gently down…upon this bed of silk
Austrian lace adorns thy bed …lie clear and crisp …such precious ilk
tender pink flesh….tiny love bites…juices licked and tongue caressed sweet, aaah!... so sweet, lingering on my quivering…lips…so fresh!
dream of layered galaxies… twinkling stars …a strawberry quest!
soft feathered strokes …nourished and pure…futures dared …bedecked in brown chocolate spa, relaxed … silky, sliding, dipping slowly in …milk?
awash with sticky cocoa… buttery drops entrap each guest!
((whispers --- hmmm - I think someone thinks I'm a poetry snob --- evil frown))
Well - I suppose in a way I am - which makes this piece just that much more satisfying MS THERESE -- I'm actually a bit surprised at how "romantic" and "ENDEARING" your write is:
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dream of layered galaxies… twinkling stars …a strawberry quest!
soft feathered strokes …nourished and pure…futures dared …bedecked in brown
= Nice stuff indeed!
Thanx for the sharing!
Jacquii.
ALSO an FYI:
If ever I find my Muse
I shall endeavor a write
about strawberry fruit
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....where do you come up with this stuff, Kim? 
-- I'm actually a bit surprised at how "romantic" and "ENDEARING" your write is:
= Nice stuff indeed!
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