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Beauty Is In The Eyes Of The Beholder
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Old 08-18-2007, 08:33 PM
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Beauty Is In The Eyes Of The Beholder

OK gang, Please "Critique" I really like this site. Good Job to all that run it. Job well done. I've only been writing a little over a year. I'm not good with grammar at all, but a lot of people want me to consolidate all my poems into a book.

I feel they are not good enough so I will probably do one just for the family, I'm not looking to get published. But I feel this would be a GREAT! place for some honest "Critique". So dig away!. Please. I want to better myself and you will not hurt any feeling on this end.

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“Beauty Is In The Eyes Of The Beholder”


Bonded and stitched
To all four corners of the globe
```
Cracks
The sun seeps through
Inhibits warmth
For the evil of your soul
```
Backlit colors
Excel through every rose
The ground you walk on
Shakes
With a tremor
Cultivating the earths
Core
```
What’s been dormant to break?
Has reawaken
To reality
```
The ancient times
Has come to live
With
The present times
```
The dawn of iniquity
Does not unite
With the console of your
character
```
Beauty is amongst all living possessions
What is it the mind sees?
That captivates the human soul
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If you went to heaven
Would you still be here?
```
Were only a crown
Inch away
Knowing what truth is
```
Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder
The windows to our souls
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Looking into your eyes
I see what truth is
Blanketing the sin of your soul
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My thoughts are a reflection
Of
What’s around me
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You heart
Is the key
To my
Soul


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Art.......I am a poet of rhymed meter, therefore not qualified to critique your writing. I just wanted to say that I see a certain depth of thought within your lines that reflect an exceptional understanding of that which is the truth. Be well, friend.

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