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The Critique Saloon This is the place to post poems that you'd like to better by getting suggestions & constructive criticism. **NOTE** For formal critique only!
i don't care about spelling, i just want some critique please

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Old 06-15-2008, 04:35 AM
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Allrighty then - Now this piece has a bit of a different vybe now that I know it's about a taboo type of love perhaps... Definitely interesting and Welcome to the Community CANNABALISTIC ((words I'd never thought I'd ever say LOL))

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Old 06-15-2008, 03:39 PM
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wait, does this mean i'm a memeber?
what does this poem have to do with that?
i'm sorry, i'm confused
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Old 06-15-2008, 03:43 PM
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haha i'm retarded
your welcoming her lol i am not in the right mind...
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- Yes - I was welcoming CANNABALISTIC ((I was just referring to the nickname too, as it's kinda wild... Making a bad joke of sorts I guess tehehehe)) --- I thought you'd already introduced yourself THEA - I guess not... But thanx for posting an introduction - now I can welcome you proper

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Haha it is quite a wild nickname, I've grown quite attached to it over the course of time. I have now posted an introduction, so I wont seem like such a stranger. Thank you for the reminder, and thanks to Thea for my nickname idea.



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thanks to Thea for my nickname idea.
Hmmm - now I have an image in my mind I can't quite get rid of.....
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Haha is that a good or a bad thing?



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Old 06-16-2008, 06:49 PM
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