nature

Supreme Energy, fluid nothing, effervescent Om:
Structured universal life, matter’s unfolding cosmos;
Exhilarating evolution, expanding along the physicals.
Nirvana, fusion of the body, mind and soul in equipoise.

The body stays not, creation demolish not.
Material consciousness oscillates, Atma explores.
It is the eon of all embracing energies; a residuum.
The suffusion of energy, in flawless realisation of the Almighty.

The intelligent performs not, insentient live in freedom.
Awareness, initiating karma with inspiring exuberance.
Meditation the path to conscious, unconsciousness empathy.
Absolute truth, a vivacious re-allocation of consciousness.

butchiesmom

I had to look up a few words (Atma and residuum) since I hadn't encountered them before but I have to say that just increased the experience of reading this. Wow! The visual I got from this was fantastic. Like finding my soul floating around in time and space exploring, experiencing and enjoying non-life, freedom from that which binds us to our bodies and this planet.

I gotta say this is a great poem. If you put this here for critique, I really don't have much nitpicking to do, lol. I have a suggestion to tighten it but that's it. Your words are tight, each one selected to add to the images you want to project. The last two lines of this stanza, which I LOVE by the way, are bolded to show my suggestions.

The body stays not, creation demolish not.
Material consciousness oscillates, Atma explores.
The eon of all embracing energies; a residuum.
Suffusion of energy, in flawless realisation of the Almighty.

Again, tight, bold visuals, a poem I wish I'd written.

hugs,
Gail

BTW, it's great to meet you.

nature

I am surprised by your reply.the removal of the 'It is' and 'the' are excellent suggestions which were never picked up by anyone else.
A writer cannot see his mistakes and all credit goes to you for the mistake i made in keeping them.
This is the most complex poem of mine and the last two lines were written after I had received answers from my Guru ji: that truth is what you believe relate to you and as you see it.
Quite different it may be universally.
Glad to know you and the brilliance in your understanding.
Thank you from my heart.

butchiesmom

Everyone needs someone who can find what they've missed. I might just be that person for you, lol. I can do that for other people, see where the unnecessary words, the correctly spelled misspelled words are (to = too, form = from etc) and occasionally find a punctuation error. It's much harder to do for myself so I understand where you're coming from.

I'm happy I was able to help you and am blushing at your compliment. I'm here to help and hope that the favor will be returned someday. Pay it forward, find something for someone else which will help that person as this has helped you.

hugs,
Gail

manohar12345

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