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Backward steps to yesterday's life,
A lonely girl basking in technologys' glow.
Summer days' golden rays pass me by,
a world worth missing in my eyes.
But in night times cover
my desperatly lonely eyes
would well,
My head would
conjure up some false images
for me to find comfort
And sleepy tears would
slide down my face.
Turn to my side
and clutch my blanket
A longed for embrace.
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Hiya Rachel.......now here this one is clearer but still could use a bit of work. I will write a more in depth tomorrow after work.... I need to post and head to bed.
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