lil Flow

Like shakira's essence of a supernatural rythem,
you put your hips into a twist,
slowly unwinding to a point that sends me to
climax
Im short of breath
you roll your hips,
faster,
hastening my respiration and my mind into a frenzy
thoughts of how those hips must hold more than rythem
but also the key to bliss and nirvana
those hips
rockin, shakin, windin and movin
movin my mind into a place no man has led me
your paradise,
within the folds of your skirt
the jinggle of your bells ask me to watch,
lure me into that paradise and pull me closer
in your jungle of music and love,
i sit scared and excited,
waiting for you to led me into another dance
set the beat and i will brace my feet,
your hips dont lie about the miracle of your being,
the ora of your music and with each note,
your belly dancing body urges me to sing.
tonite, as i sleep, the dream of you will send me
into song, as your dancing body
moves on my mind

athlone

lil flow - that left me breathless!
Loved the rhythm of it and the sexual content.
There are one or two spelling errors that should be corrected but it would be churlish of me to list them now, it was so splendidly written.
Especially liked:

tonite, as i sleep, the dream of you will send me
into song, as your dancing body
moves on my mind

Best wishes,
Zvi
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KingAce

I'm diggin this like crazy....Very good imagery of the dancing seeming so intimate and mesmerizing, It's like one of those moments where the is no sound and things all around the dancer and you are frozen or even not there at all, Whooo itz gettin hot in here nice job; Thank You

PaintedDiary

Damn, I need a man!!!! Loved it!!! Whewwwwww!!!!! LOL!!! You did your thing on this one!!!!

~*Painted*~