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Emotional Romantic In love or have poetry that tugs at ones heartstrings? Please share your romantic tear-jerkers & emotionally draining pieces right here in this forum.

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Old 07-24-2008, 01:11 AM
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I hold her gingerly
Tenderly caressing her silken flesh,
for she is as delicate as a velvet rose petal
I gently brush her soft lips with my own
Whispering softly my words of love.
You are but a fragile blossom
Waiting for the tangerine morning sun to bloom
With the gentle coaxing
Of my awaiting fingertips.
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Old 07-24-2008, 01:38 AM
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Hello Bear!

I believe that this is one of my favorites that I've read of yours. It's very sweet and I really like the imagery that you have going on too, with the tangerine sun to the flower images as well. I think that this is just another well-done romantic piece of yours. I do have one correction though:

for she is as delicate as a velvet rose petal


I believe you meant petal here instead of pedal. But, besides this, I didn't find any other things to correct/suggest and overall enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing!



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Thank you Sarah for the correction it has been made and for the magnificent comment
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this is beautiful.



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