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A Chance
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Ok so here's the deal...I been on a few times but I only read poems and not given feedback and this poem sorta explains part of the story why...I;m sorry to everybody; I just have a lot of trouble with my moods and emotions i'm so sorry but here's a sample of what I been feelin lately
A ChanceA
Chance is merely the door of opportunity being opened,
Opened up to enter the home where the heart lies,
The heart lies in the stillness of lonely,
Lonely...
Love has become but a word,
A word no longer with meaning or emotion,
Emotion that is immeasurable but most important uncontrollable,
Uncontrollable to the manipulations of distrust,
Distrust that befalls upon one's soul,
One's soul is but disgrace's folly,
Folly of horseplay due to past trials,
Trials of adversity that swell the knot in your throat,
Your throat is choked by deceit,
Deceit, lies, lost passion and overall gloom,
Gloom in your eyes nudging tears to the brink of heavy lashes,
Heavy lashes lacerate repeatedly upon the mind,
The mind...
Shadows cast upon your hopes, dreams, but not faith,
Faith solely treads with double taps as it fades,
Fades from existence,
Existence...
My prayers ascend to the pearly, gold laced gates of heaven,
"Dear lord, I wish to you in silence that better days shall greet me openly
A fair chance, possibility, one shot to gain one who shares equal emotions,
I sacrifice my being to those who continue to believe in love,
I shed the very tear of love that jesus wept for his children,
May you aid me to spread my wings,
Wings of chance to give to those the omnipotent power of true love,
In your name rests my spirit until my Angel finally coincides,
Coincides with me as I bid farewell,
One last long sigh to love,
Injury is for you to intake, the suffering will tend to me,
For me it is hopeless to encounter love justly and still sustain its melody
To a hopeful heart, when love dies, the past dies and they move on,
To my heart, when love dies, the future dies...Forever;
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You're very talented Ace
This piece is excellent Ace, speaks to the senses. I can feel the pain and sadness, the distrust, everything. But when it comes from part of ones heart, as this piece does, it does more than just speak to me. I am not sure you can understand what I am saying hun, but I clearly understand. It is hard to trust these days; love at times can make it impossible
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Dear Ace,
This one definitely came from the abyss of your being. This is wonderfully executed, and speaks volumes. I could "feel" what the piece is depicting, and it is very real. Emotions such as love, trust, etc. are not consistent for some, and this can be very difficult. Other emotions as distrust, deceit, and lies are instant for some and that is so sad. At any rate, hope all is well for you in the end, and hope that your Faith will hold you. We all protect our own carapace in some way, it is natural. I wish all the Love and blessings the Lord has in store for you. May come in small and large doses, however, if one has Faith, one will be able to receive. Take Care Ace. Great write.
Thank you for the responses ummm lately I been struggling a bit with writing and I just basically talked my way through this as I would in my mind so yeah this is the result of that....Thank you all for the responses
Great work! A very deep piece which you've managed to craft quite masterfully and which, judging from the other replies as well, we can all identify with on some level.
I also love how this piece resembles a "stream of consciousness"-type-of-thing, i.e. when one idea leads to the next, which leads to the next, and so on in a flowing manner like our thoughts. It really emphasizes the personal aspect of it all. And the imagery's great. I can definitely imagine someone taking a line from this poem and using it in a speech, like "Faith solely treads with double taps as it fades". Fantastic work.
