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Old 07-28-2008, 08:49 PM
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Erotic Melody
Erotic Melody

By Uriah Lee Hamilton

I’ll search for you
On a summer night
Beneath a radiant, orange moon;
I’ll slowly saunter
The romantic avenues
That play an erotic melody
Of skirts fluttering
In the gentle and teasing breeze.

My heart is euphoric
And my skin tingles with pulsating pleasure
To feel your sweet breath
Like an Indian feather
Upon my neck.

I’m so enamored
Of your butterfly eyes
That dart with exhilaration
Toward any new pursuit.

I tremble in your encounter
In this crystalline fairytale of love.
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Hello Uriah!

Well, I say that this poem of yours delivers what your title says... it's an erotic melody of a poem. And, it has this nice underlying sensual tone to it that is subtle and that I really enjoyed as well. With the images inside of your poem were great and this was one of my favorite lines here:

That play an erotic melody
Of skirts fluttering
In the gentle and teasing breeze.


Anywho, I thought this was really well-written and enjoyed coming across this poem. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing away!



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OOOOOOOOOOOoooooooo...lol..
..I really enjoyed this one!..
..as Sarah said...the title is perfect!..
..trulyreminded me of those "fairy tale endings" typa love!..lol
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This is a delicious write, Uriah...very entrancing...I like the idea of the Indian feather against the neck and the description of the "butterfly eyes". I know someone with eyes like that...lol! Somehow they make being alive around them...seem more alive, if you can understand that.

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i really enjoyed this!

"To feel your sweet breath
Like an Indian feather"

was a very unique metaphor and it added to the soft feel of the poem.

with this line i think you have captured the delicate portrayal of the person you are writing about...

"I’m so enamored
Of your butterfly eyes
That dart with exhilaration
Toward any new pursuit."

all in all it was very nice write and i'm looking forward to more by you



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