Moonchild

SarahNSH

Hello Moonchild!

Wow, I really do like this poem of yours! With reading through this poem I gotta say that this has to be one of my favorites. It's a very sensual poem with a lot of great images from one line to the next. You have great imagery with your poems and this one is no exception. I really like how you introduce your reader to the poem with the first paragraph:

In the chill of moon-burn
we lick the liquid of
our ocean's rush in the
rough-dangle of pleasure's play.

This is another beautiful play of words with these two lines right here:

us away to the shores of
rapture where love rustles us into


Though, I could point out several other lines and parts that I enjoyed reading. And, with the strong beginning you also end things strongly as well. I like how you give the image of them burying their toes in sand and meeting the moon again. My favorite part of your poem was this one:

Your body speaks in
meter as I recite the poem of
your language as it incites the
woman in me to rhyme
your pantomime in a
hushed release of expression.

I love how you relate it to a poem with the meter, rhyme, ect. That was just very creative and when I was reading it I just really enjoyed this part. But, like I said before I could pick out many different parts that I found enjoyable. Anywho, thanks for sharing and I hope that you keep on writing away! I really do enjoy reading your poems so I look forward to your next work!

Moonchild

Sarah...I hope all is well with you*hugs*
Thank you so much for you kind words to my poem.
It makes me smile to know that you liked and enjoyed it.
Your fav part is my fav part too about the poem part.
I like to mix poetry and love sometimes in my poems.
Well anyways...I hope you have a wonderful weekend*hugs*

Anonymous Encounter

wow, i think this is amazing! such a silvery web of beauty you've woven with words. incredible, thank you for sharing!

Moonchild

Thanks a bunch Thea...so glad you liked it!