Tha-Emissary

In all things
I am human
A stubborn lil boy
Wrapped tightly in the thick skin of a man
Who’s much too young for Viagra
To increase my drive
However, I need no man made pesticide
Not to bring my love alive
No, my love is all-natural
My search eternal
Like the quest of a fruit picker
Waking each morn
When the sun has yet to
Brush its rays in the silver water mirror
In these budding hours and humid seconds
I run madly through the orchard looking for you
Your scent so fresh and luring
That my nostrils instantly translate to my mind
That you are not the right one, but
The ripe one for me
Soon I find you
With scars
A few bruises
From harsh handling over the years
But you are still perfect
The very fruit of the Garden of Eden
And like Adam
I would risk banishment
Give up Heaven
Just to hold you in my hands
Just to see what love
Tastes like.

Moonchild

Awesome images.
This is beautiful and clearly expressed
and well written and thought out.
I love your ending...I think we all can relate to that.
Very nice, good job!

butchiesmom

This quote took my breath away. The rest of the poem is filled with vivid images, the emotions radiating from each line, but these lines made my heart sing!

Gail

Anonymous Encounter

this is my favorite that you have written. the flow is smooth, and the lines

"A stubborn lil boy
Wrapped tightly in the thick skin of a man
Who’s much too young for Viagra
To increase my drive
However, I need no man made pesticide"

caught my attention and invited me to finish the poem in interest. nice write

SarahNSH

Hello Thea!

This is just a great poem, it kind of rolls out quickly once you begin reading it, or at least, this is what happened with me. With the first line it just seemed to race forward and I really did like the pace of it and I thought that the beginning of your poem was really great and made me want to read on. I really like how you relate to the reader that when it comes down to it you are human and as you put it, "a stubborn lil boy." You have such great imagery and it just flows from one line to the next to the next. And it just reads really nicely too, I didn't hit any bumps when reading it of something not fitting or the flow feeling like it was interrupted for a moment.

When I was reading this poem this actually reminded me of the poetry that was being read at a recent poetry slam I went to. It has some great rhythm to it that isn't forced and it just sounds like when I'm reading it that it'd be fantastic being read outloud.

Anywho, one of my favorite parts of your poem are the lines above what Gail pointed out:

That you are not the right one, but
The ripe one for me
Soon I find you
With scars
A few bruises
From harsh handling over the years
But you are still perfect
-

I really did love this because when you find someone they aren't going to perfect, without blemishes, bruises, scars, or imperfections. Every person has some sort of scars that they had, emotional ones that they may have received from past relationships or whatever else they may go through. But, even though they may have the blemishes I found it a great point that you say "But you are still perfect." I just thought that this was beautiful and very true too.

Well, altogether I must say I thoroughly enjoyed this poem of yours and just found a lot of points that rang true and some great imagery from the first line to the last. I think that you did a great job with it and thank you for sharing it!

alotmarc

I really loved reading this. It came to me as natural as talking.. This is a great piece and thank you for sharing....
Everybody keeps picking a part as the best but i believe it takes the whole and I couldnt find a piece to take away except for the whole thing was my favorite.