mysticpoet729

Untouchable

Every time I see you.
You always seemed bothered.
You have something on your mind.
But you choose not to grow a smile.
You give people looks,
You carry a melancholy tune.
I see sadness in your eyes.
And the coldness in your stance.
Everybody steers away from you.
Feeling you will strike at anytime.
Giving out a roar,
That fears anyone crossing your path.
I don't know how you're feeling.
I just know you are in pain.
But you rather keep it inside.
And let it burn through your heart.
I've tried to show you love.
But it isn't sinking in.
I am afraid to even kiss you.
Knowing you'll give me frostbite.
You never see the tears,
I have cried for you.
Or see how twisted,
I have become loving you.
I have to say good-bye
Because we will never be.
Sincerely, I label you.
Untouchable.

nomadicrhymer

Fabiola - This one was written in the present tense, but almost seems more pensive, as if looking back on a life...a chapter already closed...and good riddance too, I say! That person described would be very hard to live with.

Nomad

Jeez

Negative people just
P^@@ me off.

They think ya got
nothing better to
do, then listen to
their could'a, should'a
life.

They spend all their
times crying about
their past.

Even to those that
put up with real
disabilitys, hard
times or problems.

Those jerks need
to go away to find
their own sort.

Benny

Very well written! Nuff said.

PaintedDiary

Dear Fabiola,

This was amazing. What made it even more intense, is that this seems like a journey taken personally. One can feel the pain, the heartbreak, can see the tears, and can see the window from his view watching you walk away. A special component in this write is that in your expression of pain, you still acknowledge the pain of your partner by the following lines--->

I don't know how you're feeling.
I just know you are in pain.
But you rather keep it inside.
And let it burn through your heart.

I think many can relate to this poem, as I know I can very much so, and can relate to both sides, having been there. Thank you for this write as it is beautifully executed, and the message etched. Awesome!

Kim

MsJacquiiC

Wow - talk about friggid FABIOLA - this was a tough write to let sink in... Sounds like me on Midol days --- Interesting how we have definitions of love - but when it comes to some - the definition is no more.

Interesting write - Thanx for the sharing

Jacquii.